Supervision and Scholarly Writing - Essay Example

For one, there was eminent evidence of the presence of mechanical errors in terms of use of conjunction ‘and’ to begin a sentence when its absence would still function without its use; lack of proper punctuation marks (‘;’ after could not); unsubstantiated claims (citing references for one of the breakthroughs on the proliferance of the personal computer and the Business Week article mentioned in the last sentence); structural ambiguity or excessive wordiness resulting from long sentences; use of rhetoric question, and the use of slang (plugged in) (Moser, 2011). Moreso, there were errors in the microstructure of writing manifested through placements of phrases (And most notably), connectives (and) and convoluted sentences (third sentence).

The paragraph could still be improved by addressing these mistakes by following the guidelines for writing scholarly papers as written by Moser (2011) and Diezmann (2005) where both authors detail the basic structure and things to avoid, among others. Read More