The Nursing Crisis, the Solution Lies Within - Essay Example

Answer No: 2

Part A:

The opening paragraph of the first essay was okay as it clearly communicated the problem areas. However, there should have been a proper closing paragraph to generalize the problems and solutions.

Considering the nature of the second and the third essay, I feel that opening and closing were appropriate because letters and memos do not need anything in the opening and closing paragraphs other than the original motive.

Part B:

I do not see any issue regarding cohesive devices in the essays as all of them have been written professionally. The only issue that I have observed is regarding the third essay in which ‘I’d’ could have been replaced by ‘I would’. For example, ‘Division for six years, I’d like to propose…’ could have been replaced by ‘Division for six years, I would like to propose…’. Every other thing, such as connective words, transitional sentences, and paragraphs seems to be correct.