Environmental Protection - Assignment Example

Workshop ‘Environmental Protection’ essay Does the piece address the assignment? The piece addresses the topic of environmental protection, but I have no knowledge of the actual assignment question. Does the piece work? I think it does. It addresses the problem, explains what contributes to the problem and suggests solutions to the problem in a logical progression of ideas.Does it feel complete? Not quite. The essay would benefit from including a couple of arguments against renewable energy and recycling to present a balanced view, then assert the writer’s views that ‘harnessing energy…will put America on the path to…’.

Stating arguments against and offering logical rebuttals would increase the essay’s persuasiveness. A conclusion would make the essay more complete in later drafts.Do I find it evocative? The essay treats environmental protection in a manner that evokes serious concern, but suggested solutions also offer some hope.Are there too many abstractions? The essay contains few abstractions, and generally cites specific data and specific examples.Do I feel there are some things that don’t help the piece?

Paragraph 4: It is not clear whether the reference (Seifried & Witzel 2010) is related to the data related to increased carbon dioxide in the atmosphere, or just related to the statement about methane. The paragraph seems to need additional referencing.Paragraph 4: Suggest start new paragraph at ‘Using renewable energy…’ as a new point.End of existing paragraph 4: Suggest a linking sentence to introduce the paragraph about recycling, which is a new point. For example, at start of paragraph 5: ‘In addition to renewable energy sources, recycling is another easy option.

’The essay’s main strengths. Clear, concise language, sentences uncomplicated and mostly not too long. Well structured, logical progression of ideas.