... Writing Assignment Homework Assignment Weak: Women sports are growing in popularity. Revised: Theincreasing number of female participants in soccer, basketball, tennis, volleyball and softball, have proven that women sports are growing in popularity.
Weak: New York City has a larger population than Chicago.
Revised: New York City, with a population of 8,143, 197, is ranked highest in the United States and larger compared to Chicago’s population of 2,842,518.
Homework Assignment #2
I would tell him to use connective words such and phrases as ‘first, second or moreover,’ when starting sentences in support of the topic sentence. For example in the second sentence by inserting the connector ‘first’ at th...